Check out these sentences/excerpts worthy of stalking, worthy of emulating.
*Add a comment analyzing the strengths of an excerpt below. When analyzing a piece of writing, remember to mention the author's name and title, if included, in your opening sentence. What can you learn from the author? Remember to be specific and utilize your academic diction.
“Headphones can be a teleportation device that move you somewhere majestic, a time machine that transports you to when things were more simplistic, a portal to an opaque, empty void where there is ample time for profound thinking and reasoning.” (DiCristina)
“Throughout my life, there has been one object that has assisted me through thick and thin, one object that has taught me things no one else has, one object that I cherish more than any other.” (Johnson, J)
"Sitting on my towel while the sun emanates heat and the sound of the water washes away all of my regrets, I cannot help but love where I am." (Filippone)
"The seagull's chirping sounds seem to grow fainter as I slip into my own world, where anything and everything can happen." (Filippone)
“The beautiful, ear-pleasing sound floats within the room, twisting and turning this way and that, bending down to lift your spirits. Your body trembles with the amazing feeling that you get every time that wooden box opens. It never gets old, and the feelings never dull. Your eyes are glistening, and your heart is singing along with the tune.” (Kehl, A TINY BOX OF LOVE)
"I watched in horror as my mom withdrew the white bottle from my medicine cabinet. I cringed as the thick, snow-colored liquid cascaded onto my silver spoon. I gagged as my mother forced the spoon in my mouth. Although, at the age of five, how was I supposed to know that the stomach-churning liquid had saved the lives of millions? My own included." (McNaughton)
Intro:
“Walking down the crowded streets, camera in hand, I look for subjects to photograph. There is a tree standing alone, blowing in the breeze. A woman crying. A family laughing. Rays of sunshine bursting through the clouds. Signs of hope and love, but also of solitude and sadness. These images can transcend the borders of time and language. They are bursting with emotion. They tell a story. A camera can open up a whole new world, producing a picture that is worth a thousand words.”
Conclusion:
“The tree blowing in the breeze? It was planted by a couple celebrating their fiftieth wedding anniversary today. The woman crying? Her mother just lost her battle against breast cancer. The family laughing? They are adopting a newborn baby from China in a few months. The rays of sunshine breaking through the clouds? They are a sign from God telling a girl to hold on for one more day. These photographs can make you feel every emotion. They can evoke you to create a story for every picture. And they can be understood no matter where you are from. A picture is worth a thousand words? More like millions.” (Mitchell)